Would you care to comment on a poem about very bad weather in Florida yesterday?
Cold Front
by C.S. Scotkin
Hoarfull legion
rampant, skyborn
seeths in
from a northern clime.
Feel the pressure
falter, failing
shrink now
from ice razored rain.
Trees uprooted
blossoms savaged
cyclone
screaming in the dark!
Yet survival
comes at light time.
Mother’s
kiss is cold today.
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The first word presents many problems, not the least being that it isn’t really a word. I’m all for the creation of new words, they make us stop and think. But if I were to use this, I would spell it "hoarful." Even so it’s too confusing to be presented as the first word because it sounds like too many others: horrible, awful, et alia. I would wait until something of the theme has been planted in the reader’s mind. Then the word would gain strength rather than being a stumbling block. "Seethes in" also presents a problem. [I assume the missing 'e' is just a typo, and not a conscious effort to create another new word.] I believe poetry is meant to be read aloud, and heard by an audience - even if that audience consists solely of the reader himself - and "seethes in" gets heard as "sees in." My last cavil is the exclamation mark, which I feel is redundant and distracting. And the reason I am bothering to pick at all these nits is that this is a truly magnificent work. It’s concise and powerful, a verbal equivalent of a cyclone.
Mother Earth can be cold, it seems, even in usually warm Florida.
Although I have never experienced a cyclone, I know about hurricanes, but they are not progeny of Mother Earth. She is just as affected by wind and Ocean’s moods as are her children.
November 30 is the end of that type of weather, right? We northerners’ sent you a chill, eh.
Reads like an interesting night, glad you’re safe.
Snow and sleet in and around Atlanta tonight. Gonna cuddle a bit closer to Annie.
Stay warm and safe!
Sounds like a typical day here in Connecticut!
Yep we cant stop mother nature well done
That weather’s too hoarfull for words! You need to fly south for the winter…