Comments on: Would you care to comment on a poem about very bad weather in Florida yesterday? http://hurricanequestions.com/would-you-care-to-comment-on-a-poem-about-very-bad-weather-in-florida-yesterday.htm Thu, 24 May 2012 11:20:21 +0000 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.7.1 hourly 1 By: Jeff Jacob Lourie http://hurricanequestions.com/would-you-care-to-comment-on-a-poem-about-very-bad-weather-in-florida-yesterday.htm/comment-page-1#comment-3047 Jeff Jacob Lourie Fri, 31 Jul 2009 09:35:12 +0000 http://hurricanequestions.com/would-you-care-to-comment-on-a-poem-about-very-bad-weather-in-florida-yesterday.htm#comment-3047 The first word presents many problems, not the least being that it isn't really a word. I'm all for the creation of new words, they make us stop and think. But if I were to use this, I would spell it "hoarful." Even so it's too confusing to be presented as the first word because it sounds like too many others: horrible, awful, et alia. I would wait until something of the theme has been planted in the reader's mind. Then the word would gain strength rather than being a stumbling block. "Seethes in" also presents a problem. [I assume the missing 'e' is just a typo, and not a conscious effort to create another new word.] I believe poetry is meant to be read aloud, and heard by an audience - even if that audience consists solely of the reader himself - and "seethes in" gets heard as "sees in." My last cavil is the exclamation mark, which I feel is redundant and distracting. And the reason I am bothering to pick at all these nits is that this is a truly magnificent work. It's concise and powerful, a verbal equivalent of a cyclone. The first word presents many problems, not the least being that it isn’t really a word. I’m all for the creation of new words, they make us stop and think. But if I were to use this, I would spell it "hoarful." Even so it’s too confusing to be presented as the first word because it sounds like too many others: horrible, awful, et alia. I would wait until something of the theme has been planted in the reader’s mind. Then the word would gain strength rather than being a stumbling block. "Seethes in" also presents a problem. [I assume the missing 'e' is just a typo, and not a conscious effort to create another new word.] I believe poetry is meant to be read aloud, and heard by an audience - even if that audience consists solely of the reader himself - and "seethes in" gets heard as "sees in." My last cavil is the exclamation mark, which I feel is redundant and distracting. And the reason I am bothering to pick at all these nits is that this is a truly magnificent work. It’s concise and powerful, a verbal equivalent of a cyclone.

]]> By: Elaine P http://hurricanequestions.com/would-you-care-to-comment-on-a-poem-about-very-bad-weather-in-florida-yesterday.htm/comment-page-1#comment-3048 Elaine P Fri, 31 Jul 2009 09:35:12 +0000 http://hurricanequestions.com/would-you-care-to-comment-on-a-poem-about-very-bad-weather-in-florida-yesterday.htm#comment-3048 Mother Earth can be cold, it seems, even in usually warm Florida. Although I have never experienced a cyclone, I know about hurricanes, but they are not progeny of Mother Earth. She is just as affected by wind and Ocean's moods as are her children. Mother Earth can be cold, it seems, even in usually warm Florida.

Although I have never experienced a cyclone, I know about hurricanes, but they are not progeny of Mother Earth. She is just as affected by wind and Ocean’s moods as are her children.

]]> By: DAHha let it snow http://hurricanequestions.com/would-you-care-to-comment-on-a-poem-about-very-bad-weather-in-florida-yesterday.htm/comment-page-1#comment-3049 DAHha let it snow Fri, 31 Jul 2009 09:35:12 +0000 http://hurricanequestions.com/would-you-care-to-comment-on-a-poem-about-very-bad-weather-in-florida-yesterday.htm#comment-3049 November 30 is the end of that type of weather, right? We northerners' sent you a chill, eh. Reads like an interesting night, glad you're safe. November 30 is the end of that type of weather, right? We northerners’ sent you a chill, eh.
Reads like an interesting night, glad you’re safe.

]]> By: Dondi http://hurricanequestions.com/would-you-care-to-comment-on-a-poem-about-very-bad-weather-in-florida-yesterday.htm/comment-page-1#comment-3050 Dondi Fri, 31 Jul 2009 09:35:12 +0000 http://hurricanequestions.com/would-you-care-to-comment-on-a-poem-about-very-bad-weather-in-florida-yesterday.htm#comment-3050 Snow and sleet in and around Atlanta tonight. Gonna cuddle a bit closer to Annie. Snow and sleet in and around Atlanta tonight. Gonna cuddle a bit closer to Annie.

]]> By: Sin http://hurricanequestions.com/would-you-care-to-comment-on-a-poem-about-very-bad-weather-in-florida-yesterday.htm/comment-page-1#comment-3051 Sin Fri, 31 Jul 2009 09:35:12 +0000 http://hurricanequestions.com/would-you-care-to-comment-on-a-poem-about-very-bad-weather-in-florida-yesterday.htm#comment-3051 Stay warm and safe! Stay warm and safe!

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