Would you say this is a good eye catcher to a book?
Epilogue: Let me start off by saying the worlds in great shape, its year 2027 and we have civil war in Russia…..again. There’s a big old mound of dirt of what WAS China due to a Massive computer failure and the accidental launch of 23 nuclear war heads. The War Heads were self destructed before they left the ground, what was once a country of 1,330,044,544 is now nothing but a few mutants from the radiation and death, death is everywhere. The American and Canadian economy has collapsed; people line the streets for bits of scraps. Thousands die of hunger, disease and exposure every day.
Mexico has been taking over by the drug war, being civil is not an option, kill or be killed.
Germany has reverted to Dictatorship, 3rd times a charm?
Global warming has caused massive flooding all over the world, earthquakes are a part of everyday life, wild fires have destroyed most of the livestock and food supplies, hurricanes have been able to sweep all the way to the middle of the USA to Arizona, Ohio and in some rare cases all the way to Michigan. The world is collapsing in on its self. Count your blessings because chances are you wont have them for much longer.
I know its far fetched but I love wrighting about this kind of stuff
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Before you start writing, you’re going to need to learn how to make sentences.
FOR EXAMPLE,
"The War Heads were self destructed before they left the ground, what was once a country of 1,330,044,544 is now nothing but a few mutants from the radiation and death, death is everywhere."
This should be divided into a number of sentences.
"The War Heads self-destructed before they left the ground. What was once a country of 1,330,044,544 is now nothing but a few mutants from the radiation and death; death is everywhere."
Although the writing is still bad ("now nothing but a few mutants from the radiation and death" so, the people who are left are mutants because they died, or because others died? this is just bad) at least you’ll, hopefully, come to understand punctuation a bit.
Also, if the war heads can self-destruct, that is, destruct on their own, then they WERE not self-destructed, as you wrote. This implies that SOMEONE destructed the missiles, and then it wouldn’t be self-destruction.
You have a lot of inconsistencies like this in your writing. It’s just sloppy and bad. And dystopian futures have been done to death.
I do like the idea, but it seems like too much information it too little space. Try to stretch it out a little longer so that it has a little more substance. And, there are some grammatical things that need to be worked out, but I really do think it seems interesting. (I love reading/ these kinds of things too) This story sounds interesting. And I really like that last line.